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You asked for feedback: style is fun, content is good, but I’d cut out the last few paragraphs since they feel a little redundant. Maybe end it with getting the job and if you want to discuss the characters you introduce in the following paragraph, identify them when you use them. I think this is more in keeping with the brisk and chatty style if that’s what you’re going for. Mention but don’t dwell on the faith and good fortune stuff

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